1) The pitch: see above
2) A reflection on feedback from the last pitch: Unfortunately, due to technical difficulties, I was not able to get my first pitch post before the deadline, but I will list some of my own self-reflections on the video. The biggest reflection for me was that I needed to get the video done long before the deadline to account for any technical difficulties. I also felt that I should have done more to get better lighting for my video, as well as look more professional than I did in the first video. The most important thing to the overall quality of the video was to write up a better script than I did for the first one.
3) What I changed based on my feedback: The biggest thing I changed in this second elevator pitch was to get it done long before the deadline. I also took my time and wrote out a detailed script that I was able to refer to while speaking to remember my major talking points and the general flow of the pitch. To solve the issues with the presentation, I had a friend of mine film for me and we chose a location that has lots of natural lighting. I also made sure to dress to impress, like I would were I to deliver an actual elevator pitch.
Dear Elery,
ReplyDeleteI believe you did a great job describing to your audience what your product is about. You broke it into different parts and really explained to me what your product can be used for and how many different ways it can be used. I also enjoyed your opening hook "three letters" because it got me engaged into what you were going to talk about next. The only critique I have would be to act a little more enthusiastic. Thank you Elery.
I could really tell that you put more time into this pitch. You did a great job explaining how the product is natural and harmless. Pet owners truly care for the safety of their pet and take that factor into deep consideration. I also liked how you separated the pitch into two separate categories of the product and distribution system. This really helps the viewer understand the full scale of your goal.
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